bluewaterlily

This was a nice poem, especially for your first try. Your imagery was nice, and you had good metaphors and similes. However, it did feel a slight bit repetitive at ...

This poem was good and has a lot of potential. The imagery was good and the emotions, fairly strong. However, sometimes the flow seemed faltered. Here's an example: In that ...

Hello, I'm bluewaterlily, and I will be reviewing your story. Red=corrections Blue=comments Gunfire could be heard throughout the night darkened city. There should be a hyphen between night and darken

Hi, I'm bluewaterlily, and I'll be reviewing your story. red=corrections blue=comments With a graceful twist of her body, she leapt off the branch and sailed downwards, the cool wind filling ...

I'm bluewaterlily, and I'll be reviewing your story today. red=corrections blue=comments Muscles tense, Arrisa Torrow zoned in on the path in front of her self , and tuned out the ...

I'm not good at reviewing poetry, but I think this was a very nice poem. You did a really good job with the imagery; the descriptions were very vivid. I ...

Hi, kr1117, I'm bluewaterlily and I will be reviewing your story today. red=corrections blue=comments “We will continue traveling along the edge of the Teirre forest until we reach Alden. When ...

Here is your review as requested. Sorry it took so long, but I had to run alot of errands. Any way, onto the review. Mrs. Cole looked up to her ...

I'm here to review your story. From the pale spectres of the Northern Shores, to honey skinned sailors of the Sister Isles, half of Quilantien rallied to the man in ...

bluewaterlily here to review your story. red=corrections blue=comments The day passed slowly. Thorne had given me more work than ever before, and all over the manor, so I spent half ...

bluewaterlily at your service for a review. red=corrections blue=comments (bEGINNING OF)Chapter one: Eyes of fire Millennia has passed since the Annihilation, the event that wiped the mudmonkeys from

I'm not good at reviewing poetry, but this is a very good poem. red=corrections green=how I would write it I know I'm not good at writing poetry but I hope ...

Normally,I would give you a good, long review, but there's nothing for me to correct! Your spelling, grammar, and punctuation were impeccable. The characters and plot are definitely unique. I'm ...

bluewaterlily here to review your story. red=corrections blue=comments green=delete Joslynn and I huddled together, nibbling our already stubby fingernails. Abigail and Vanessa sat on their bunks read

bluewaterlily at your service for a review. red=corrections blue=comments Someone was chasing me. We were in a dark forest. Fog was creeping around me. Leaves rustled and , I heard ...