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Re: Monster under my bed (On a lonely night)
I think your first two opening lines set the mood really well, but then I thought you let yourself down a bit. I thought you should have continued addressing the ...
Jul 20, 2012 -
Re: Silence
My interpretation at least was that someone had just been murdered in front of you and you were talking rather eerily in the 3rd person. Just in that moment I ...
Jul 20, 2012 -
Re: "Keys in Broken Locks"
Personally I thought you could have used a journey to transition from the 1st to the 2nd stanza, great you've found the key .. now how do you feel? You ...
Jul 20, 2012