beforeIforget

I like the premise of this, except I really think you can expand a lot upon it, if you have the time. Like your opening paragraph, for example: "My name ...

To be honest I thought I was going to hate this and that the narrator would be the one sitting by herself but you flipped the script and I love ...

All right, so let's just jump right in, shall we? First off, you used an expected hook - dialogue. If you're going to start like that, then maybe add in ...

hi! i think this is probably just something you wrote to vent about moving, right? i know that feeling. but besides that, i think this is really clear and good ...