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Romance stories are definitely a guilty pleasure of mine. I enjoyed this entire story a whole lot, until you started winding down to the end. You have a really intense ...

I found few problems with this. However, you are missing some commas. I've been too lazy to do in depth grammar crits, but a quick rule: when addressing someone, their ...

Parts of this, namely the Gaelic and the Lugh reference, made me say "sqweee!" Unfortunately, I don't speak Gaelic. But it's nice to see. I thought that your dialogue was ...

This was gruesome. It was also confusing and hard to follow. Part of this, I think, is because you didn't have the proper spacing between your paragraphs. (Always makes things ...

In general, I liked it. But there are a few things I want to point out in the line of cliches, and so with this critique there comes a disclaimer. ...

It's good for a start, but you have a few spelling errors and grammar mistakes. Since 'won't' is a contraction, you need the apostrophe. Also, you spelled beauty and believe ...

I thought that this was very well written. However, I disagree with Coryab222 about the description in the second part. I think it was better with less description, because the ...