barefootrunner

This was good, pretty powerful writing, but I would be careful of TV series references, especially if you want to reach wider audiences. There was not enough visual input for ...

Good stuff! Previous critics got most of the grammar things, but just a warning: stick to the correct tense! Nearly all the mistakes that I saw were verb mistakes. You ...

I really liked this one. It is a huge improvement on the last story of yours that I reviewed, especially character-wise. I am really touched by the poor guy and ...

Nice story! I'll just pick on the grammar first. This may be overly harsh - if so, please excuse me! Most of these are either grammos, or just my own ...

Well well well! What have we here? A lilibonelle? You are amazing! Those repetative lines are an absolute horror to get quite right. Yours aren't perfect, but they're quite fine ...

Great work! I'm starting with what would usually be my ending-line here because you changed the way I see the world :). Cool visuals, cold, even - lots of sparkles, ...

Ugh... Cool... It's so weird, so intriguing... What can I say... This is certainly a very special piece of work and it looks as though you have put some thought ...

I think that Alfonso got most of those tenses, but you have a spelling mistake, "knarred", in the first paragraph, which should be "gnarled". I love this story! It is ...

Good! It was easy to follow, despite having no punctuation! The first stanza was great, but one or two things in the next stanza: But outside your head is not ...

I liked the poem's metaphorical base, the stanzas were good, but the first stanza bothered me. The word order was switched around. I'm sure you had your reasons for doing ...

This poem was cute! The first stanza made me muddled, it was a bit too much in my opinion. The rest was great, I liked the contrasts. I think the ...

This one gets a like from me as a good, solid bit of free verse that keeps it real. I had no issues with the poem and am actually just ...

I liked the descriptions, but I agree with Rain -- the last lines break up the flow and the picture should be in a spoiler. The poem seemed a bit ...

A few preliminary tips on this one: 1) Don't preach, chat with us readers, get down to our level. 2) Keep it simple, short and sweet and uncluttered. 3) Focus ...

Nice pun in the title! There are a few grammos and typos. Jace will never go to high school since he already knows more than most scholars, I mean wouldn%u2019t ...