barefootrunner

I'm really enjoying your story! But down to business—okay, spelling and grammar: How is it I can just place my life with her and pretend like nothing is wrong with ...

Spelling and grammar: These are very small errors, and I'm being nitpicky, but here they are: In your first paragraph, you have this: 'She leads me into a small empty ...

Okay, hello again! Firstly the spelling and grammar. Remember to keep the tense constant. In your first paragraph, you have a quick detour into the past tense which is not ...

Okay! Rocket-fuel to the action! Jumping right in with spelling, grammar and conveyance. Tying "a fabric" does not fit. You might want to replace it with "a rag" or "some ...

Yup, I'm back! Let's have a look: Spelling, grammar and conveyance: The "Is she unconscious? No, her hand is still white" is very vague. I was wondering exactly what you ...

Yes, I am back, and determined to review! Spelling, grammar and conveyance: The cement ground is stained red from the constant drip up above. What drip up above? If it ...

Okay, I'm back! The spelling and grammar is better this time, only two corrections: The guard's face goes from happy at being done, to red and furious. The "to" you ...

Hi there! Firstly, I loved this. I am going to read all of your chapters after this. I would spell out the "six foot two", and the "he is" before ...

Hi, Rydia! It's me again, come to review. Spelling and grammar: Only one: I do believe that you meant Megara, Hercules' first wife, and not Megora, the Swiss metal band. ...

Hi Dreamwalker! This piece needs one or two edits. I've just typed out the corrections here. my armour's rusted we won't find happily relatable to ever after Then there is ...

Hi there! This is not your only short story ending with the death of the main character, is it? You are depriving your readers of their main joy! *sniff* Anyway, ...

Okay, this was pretty good, but there was this sense of unreality, because whitecoats come from everywhere, carrying long-range weapons, like guns. Then the clan have a nice, cozy chat ...

Hello Bhayden! A very good intro, and with perfectly decent spelling and grammar. My first piece of advice would be to look at your tenses. Keep even the thoughts in ...

Yes, it's me again! Let's take a look at the spelling and grammar. “Okay, so we lay here and pretend we are still knocked out, and when the whitecoats take ...

I had to read on—it was irresistible! Spelling and grammar: Use of the apostrophe in "A's" is incorrect. It should not be used for the formation of plurals of capitals, ...