barefootrunner

Hi there, monolith! I don't think I have read any of your poems yet, but I'll start my review with this: I like the message of the poem, but I ...

Hi there! Back for another review! Okay, as I said in my previous review, please keep the text size standard and you have several strange spaces that you should delete ...

Hi there! Please read my reviews on your last two chapters—they might help with the grammatical aspect of this piece. I think that the 3 you put in, was a ...

Hi there! I have one big grammar lesson for you in direct speech, but I hope it will help you in the end :) Your direct speech needs work, so ...

Hi there! Spelling and grammar have already been discussed, so I'll go straight through to the content: This weather... Unless you purposefully made it 'a dark and stormy night' to ...

Hi there, soccer! Welcome to YWS! Spelling and grammar: 'Out of nowhere'. Nowhere is one word. 'When I finally got home I told my mom what had happened, her face ...

Hello there, DNCR! Okay, I see you have a nice, long review from Enigma already, so I'll keep mine short. Firstly, break it up! Break this one, long, flowing paragraph ...

Hi there! I hope you have been enjoying YWS! It does seem like it, judging by this :) Spelling and grammar: NOTHING! Yes, nothing! Very well done, firepen! Poeticism: Okay, ...

Hi there! Spelling and grammar: You have 'i' in the first line, then you have 'I' in the rest. I think you might have meant them all to be capitalised. ...

Hello there! Spelling and grammar: "fulfill" should be spelt "fulfil". Otherwise, nothing wrong. Poeticism: Again, very little to recommend itself. You are just telling us everything about the geisha

Hello there, Pandorax, and welcome to YWS! Spelling and grammar: This is very possibly simply poetic licence, but Cosmos cannot be birthed 'out of' chaos. Chaos births Cosmos—the 'out of' ...

Hi there, Tsukarin! Welcome to YWS, first of all. And hi, Spinme! My first tip to you would be to revise the opening sentence. Statements about the weather are clichéd. ...

Very little spelling and grammar, this time: Again, lay. It should be lie. 'Alright, not too fast, don’t hit anything, okay.' That 'alright' is fine, but it is currently 'non-standard'. ...

Okay, jumping right in with spelling and grammar: My first tip to you would be to keep the tense regular. You have a few deviations into the past tense, especially ...

Back for more! Spelling and grammar: 'His hair is cropped short and he is cleanly shaven, well, except for the side burns.' Sideburns is one word. 'They think they’re so ...