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Re: A Poem for You
So, I just happened to feel like going through my old poetry and ended up here. Yay to finding pieces that I loved years back. I still do :)
May 30, 2016 -
Re: That Particular Juicy Fruit I Crave About Every Boring Morning
This is BEAUTIFUL. And hey, I see you've been experimenting with rhymes :) Fun, eh? Love the word play and the fact that you had a consistent theme; you definitely ...
Feb 26, 2014 -
Re: Hypocrisy’s Ignorance
Very powerful. I'd agree with cheska199 regarding the punctuation as it really helps with the flow and it'll help project the right emotion but I wouldn't add extra words so ...
Feb 26, 2014 -
Re: Butterfly Rooms
Hi guys! Thanks for the comments/reviews. Sorry for the vagueness, I haven't submitted anything in awhile and YWS has changed since then. Anyway, if you'd look at the work description, ...
Oct 10, 2012 -
Re: Walls
Hey LittleLionWoman, Thanks for the review, although you're right about not reading it right. Well, everyone's entitled to reading poetry in a particular way but I feel that mine was ...
Oct 2, 2011 -
Re: What If It's Fate?
Thanks :)
Apr 6, 2011 -
Re: Everyday Companion
Thanks for the comments! I just realized the metaphor in the last line is a bit out of place because it's much deeper compared to the other lines which are ...
Feb 22, 2011 -
Re: You Never Loved Me.
I see the conscious effort to make things rhyme, but if you read it through; the rhythm doesn't really flow well. Other than that, I see potential but you might ...
Oct 20, 2009 -
Re: Lemongrass
Short, simple, yet full of depth. The imagery was striking. Keep up the good work!
Oct 18, 2009 -
Re: I Give You A Curtsy
thanks guys! i fixed that up already. :D thanks for pointing it out! any other suggestion/comment would be helpful. :D
Sep 1, 2009 -
Re: Genetics
I like the idea behind it. There's good concept but poor wording. You might want to express it in a more dramatic/expressive manner otherwise people won't give it much thought.
Aug 29, 2009 -
Re: A Poem for You
James! I'm speechless! that was BEAUTIFUL! :]
Aug 28, 2009 -
Re: My notebook
Aside from inconsistencies in rhyme (blank & ink), there's nothing more i can say about it. I just LOVE it! :] Keep Writing!
Aug 25, 2009 -
Re: Forgive my Absence
bf, i had watery eyes after i read this! it's just LOVELY! sorry, i know you really can't count my comments as 'reviews', but what else can i say? Perfectly ...
Aug 25, 2009 -
Re: Strained Smile
This is a very pretty poem, although -- dare I say? -- I am beginning to be quite bored with the subject. Yes, yes, we know you love is leaving ...
Aug 15, 2009