babymagic18

This was well written but we need to know the time frame as the readers so that we may get a better picture of the scene. This was very enjoyable ...

oh boy does your writing need work. I couldn't even get through because through this whole thing you are telling and not showing, that is a big no no in ...

This was very well written I enjoyed very much reading this. I am almost surprised that I didn't come up with something like this to write about. I think it ...

You used I too many times in your piece and it was a bit long....you might havw wanted to shorten that up a bit before posting it. When things are ...

This needs work. It needs to be broken up into paragraphs and I noticed in the beginning that you are showing not telling and thats like one of the top ...

I must say that the title is very catchy it makes the reader want to know all about this princess and her story. When your writing you really want to ...

The first few words just totally pulled me in! way to go. I would really like to read more of your pieces this was a very well written piece. With ...

when writing i find it best when you start the scene with a name that way people can better view the character. It is only helpful. I discovered this after ...

I won't lie to you none of it flowed and when that happens others don't know what you are tyring to make them see and that can throw them off ...

sorry I didn't understand the poem it just didn't flow in my mind. But I do get how you are trying to send a message to the insecure if i ...

I really enjoyed reading this. The title is very good. I liked the theme I have often thought of making a story with angels in it but I have no ...

I see how it is that you didn't win and lost to a nine year old. You have no description of the surroundings. I have no idea what the charaters ...

This needs a ton of work no lie. It all needs to be separated into paragraphs which will only make it easier for the readers to follow. If not then ...

I liked this piece the beggining had me drawn in and thats what I want when I'm reading so good job. I alos liked the title. The main character was ...

Um I really don't know what to say about this piece other than it needs serious work done to it if you really want people to read it. The title ...