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Re: Can You Not?
Hi! =) Your piece overall has a good flow and I can definitely see that you're comfortable with expressing and conveying through words. However, one suggestion that comes in mind ...
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Re: Romance, RIP
HAAHAAHHA CAN I JUST SAY THAT I LOVE YOU AND I WANNA MARRY YOU AlREADY AFTER READING YOUR INTRO ABOUT THIS POEM I really love what you captured and how ...
Jan 15, 2014 -
Re: Forever light
"Things will be ok"????? ARE U SRS no offense but I really think you can elaborate the act of placating and consolation in muuuuuuuuuuuccch more vivid imagery and descriptions. Especially ...
Jan 15, 2014 -
Re: Wrists
This is kind of a personal aesthetic's choice, but I would usually never recommend italicizing a word to make a point. Because if you un-italicize the word "life", the whole ...
Jan 15, 2014 -
Re: Now and Forever
Hey vluvswriting, I'm really impressed and absolutely love by your rhymes. Personally, I have never been that good with rhyming because I think it obstructs articulation by constraining the format. ...
Jan 15, 2014
