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  • Poetry » Realistic, Teen Fiction Re: Can You Not?

    Hi! =) Your piece overall has a good flow and I can definitely see that you're comfortable with expressing and conveying through words. However, one suggestion that comes in mind ...

    Jan 15, 2014
  • Poetry » Satire, Romantic Re: Romance, RIP

    HAAHAAHHA CAN I JUST SAY THAT I LOVE YOU AND I WANNA MARRY YOU AlREADY AFTER READING YOUR INTRO ABOUT THIS POEM I really love what you captured and how ...

    Jan 15, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Forever light

    "Things will be ok"????? ARE U SRS no offense but I really think you can elaborate the act of placating and consolation in muuuuuuuuuuuccch more vivid imagery and descriptions. Especially ...

    Jan 15, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Wrists

    This is kind of a personal aesthetic's choice, but I would usually never recommend italicizing a word to make a point. Because if you un-italicize the word "life", the whole ...

    Jan 15, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, Fantasy Re: Now and Forever

    Hey vluvswriting, I'm really impressed and absolutely love by your rhymes. Personally, I have never been that good with rhyming because I think it obstructs articulation by constraining the format. ...

    Jan 15, 2014


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