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Wow, I can't believe this story was even read after over 5 years of dust settling silently over it. I am bewildered that you all care so much. As for ...

Okay, so the 'grade' thing, that's because I live in NZ, and we have 'year 9,' and such, so I can see why you are confused. I will now put ...

Added more detail how...? Like, take out dialogue and add description? I think I have too much dialogue... Oh, and did anyone find the ending really cliche? Or the story ...

This is great - really. I wasn't in the mood to read something long right now, but it flowed so well that I didn't even realise. Keep it up :)

Thanks for all of the comments, YWS-ers! I'm not sure if I can be brave enough to go back and read something that close to twilight, to edit, but I ...

OMG> I just had a nearly completed review... then I clicked away from the page... and it's all gone. I'm so sorry! I shall get right to it! Okay, this ...

Amazing! I loved it! It's so...descriptive. But in a good way. Not like Harry Potter where it take four pages to describe a smell. Ugh. Even though werewolves are more ...

Three weeks and eight bust ed noses after starting school, Kyran had started Taekwondo, Karate, Judo, Strength and Stamina classes. He was fed up of being bullied. Now he had ...

Thanks midnightread. I was goijng to have this as a prologue in my new book, but then I re-arranged things. I'll have to re=write it, but I'll definately take your ...

Should be in fantasy fic? E-mail a mod and they'll change it for you.

The dishwasher repairman. He slipped the note under the pile when he left, and wired the dishwasher to send vaults into the sink. Solved. Knew it from the moment she ...

Hey, I really like your style. You have a very solid voice, one that seems to be made for entertainment. I couldn't help but notice you are a science geek, ...

I'm sorry, I tried to make i obvious. It was a ransmitter... radio comtrolled poisin that they were breathing in in the air. Too complicated?

Yeah, that's fine. Glad to hear you like it... enough to review, anyway.

Yup. I like this version better. The personality of this comes through more, and I can almost hear his voice when he says stuff like, yeah, I'm a deep man, ...