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Re: dirty knees, cloudy skies
The first line kind of has a Rythm but I feel like we lose it. Also is this guy dead? And he is writing a poem? Some stuff needs to ...
Sep 21, 2015 -
Re: man
Wow! Aspiring Author here and you obviously put a lot of thought into it. In the last stanza you kind of destroy the He is ___. "He is of a ...
Sep 21, 2015 -
Re: Chapter 1: Nice to Meet You, Part 2
ERMAGOD! This is so good! I really like the "I stare at this creature sitting in front of me. She is from another planet- something foreign. She’s the type of ...
Sep 21, 2015 -
Re: The Queen of the Cogs
I really like it. The onatponapiea you have going on. It kinda of just doesn't make sense because I feel a story here, but I just can't put my finger ...
Sep 21, 2015 -
Re: Chapter 1.1: Nice To Meet You
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Sep 21, 2015
I just want to say that the whole taking her home happened really fast. If it happened slower it would have seemed like he was bad at it, the way ...