ashleylee

Oooo, I have a prediction!! I have a prediction!! I believe that this girl she ran into, who called her a “newbie” is another phantom, another ghost! Am I right? ...

Wow, kelsey, just simply wow! I must have a round applause sent to you! *boisterous screams of joy and echoing claps ring in the room* This was a really amazing ...

A tense moment for Gen and Jeff, eh? :D I just love how you made the moment be so…so…wolf-like but still kept it human. How he used mating and mate ...

Good, as usual kelsey… *sighs heavily* I am going to kidnap your computer one day so I can steal all those wonderful vocabulary words you have there all to yourself! ...

Oh my goodness! This was simply HILARIOUS! I LOVE IT! It is the most adorable, humorous fairy tale I have ever read! Wonderful job! His black hair, accented by long, ...

I only caught one thing: There names were Jasper and Kendra Nolus. It should be “Their” instead of “There” Otherwise, very interesting! :D I will keep my eye out for ...

Gosh, your story just keeps me wanting more! :D I especially enjoyed when Dani finally stood up to her dad and told him all about his mid-life-crisis! –lol- Love it! ...

Yes, you do have a very good concept here. It is interesting and attention-grabbing, which is always a must! :D As I see that two people have already covered your ...

All right, this was good. Again, a lot, and I mean a lot, of TELLING. You need to somehow SHOW us what is happening without giving us a list about ...

This was decent, I guess. But it felt more like a opening to a play or something, when they give the backgrounds of all the characters. I didn’t like how ...

Nice job! :D As usual. I just love these stories about real life. They are so easily related too and let the reader get somehow attached to all of your ...

Cute, cute, cute! :D I like this side of Jess! Normally, she is always so serious. But with Will, she is a smiling, happy girl, and that just makes her ...

Kelsey, Kelsey, Kelsey…what do I do with you? Seriously, you need to stop writing such good stories, or someday I might just give up writing. Gosh, you make me look ...

Good! :D I enjoyed it! You definitely caught my attention better than the first chapter! Okay, first I’m going to do the line-by-line stuff (boring, I know) and then I ...

At first, this didn’t really catch my attention. But when I reached the last few paragraphs, I now can’t wait to read chapter two! My first advise would be to ...