artemis15sc

I really liked this, great way to start a story. I didn't find any grammatical errors, but I'm not very good at finding them anyway so for all I know ...

Wow. Your descriptions are epic. Dark toned, slightly gory, and depressing yes, but epic. I can't think of any critism, the emotion and power behind this is breath-taking. Right from ...

I've always been a fan of warriors fanfiction, and I think you did a great job of recreating the clans and creating your cat characters. I liked it overall, but ...

I also applaud you, it was extremely brilliant. I love these poems that take something simple or ordinary, yet lace it with so much magic and meaning. They sometimes end ...

I can't think of any other little nitpicks to add, and it looks like you've fixed most of them already. let me just say I am really excited to read ...

wow. I was only going to read half but there was no way I could stop. your writing is beautiful and conveyed her emmotion exquisitely. your build up was extremely ...

I've always been a fan of those 'outside the box" writing styles, and this one certainly is unique. Just one thing I want to look at. Marco: They say I’m ...

I wish i could write like this. The way your narrate is so unique, I love it. Pretty much everything I wanted to say has already been said, though even ...

Your poem has a lot of ideas broken up over lines. While this is sometimes annoying, you totally pulled it off. I truly enjoyed reading this. Someone already said this, ...

Did you really just end there? You are a cruel individual. I loved your beginning! I was hooked from the start, and due to your superb writing I only became ...

In the beginning it was kind of just...random, but it kept getting stronger and stronger as you went along. By the end I was completely breathless(figuratively). It ended up being ...

Awesome story! just a few little things. Even though with-in certain areas a slice of heavenly blue peeked out. I think it would sound better if you reversed it Even ...

At first I thought she was talking to the actual moon. Is this really a journal entry, or just what she's thinking in her head? I think it might be ...

The most unexpected ending of a poem I have ever read. I was so shocked, I read it like three times just to make sure I'd read that last line ...

My belief on a prologue is this; It's there to introduce the story, but if it's only used if the introduction doesn't fit with whatever comes next in the story, ...