arspoetica

Well since you've made changes, i guess it's time for a re-review. He bellows Leers Down my ears; "Can you hear me through your tears?" I really like this stanza, ...

I went into this piece determined to give helpful tips but i can't think of anything! I didn't see any grammatical mistakes, or any lines that were confusing or choppy. ...

Amazing job with this piece! About halfway through i forgot it was a fiction piece. Amazing use of vocabulary and character development as well! I'd give constructive critisizm but i ...

Definitely a unique piece. I thoroughly enjoyed it, especially when you broke the wall between the reader and the piece, i rarely see that done well. Well done!