armisael

thank you!! this really helped ive always been wary of how my free verse should be organized and ill definitely work on tone and rhythm with my stanzas :)

Thank you so much! I definitely want to expand the worldbuilding and alien terms. I wanted to see how it would flow, but I'll definitely work to provide clear meanings!

thank you so much for the review!!! i followed your advice and now i think it flows much better :)

Hey! The pacing seems a lot better now, much easier to keep up with. The choppiness seems to be gone, going from line to line is very smooth. Like I ...

thank you! i've been wondering about the profanity myself, and i'll definitely change "ungratefulness." any chance to get a better synonym, i'll take. thanks so much!! i'll take a close ...

Good twist ending I didn't expect that! Well written, nice style, good flow. There's a good air of sentimentality in this story which I think fits in nicely with the ...