ariberry97

Ummm, yeah. This isn't a very good story. Not very intence, or powerful. I dislike it. You need to work on your spelling, and grammar. You need to make this ...

This is a very good story. I like it very much. I like the way you present each element in your story. I like how you talk about he power ...

I like this poem, but I think you should use more detail on what your "dear temtation" looks like, and why your temtation is your temtation. I like this work, ...

I like this story a lot because this is how I feel. I think you should make this into a short story because I would definatly anjoy reading it if ...