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Please tell if these rhymes are better( sorry, but I just prefer rhymes over blank verse, cant help it, but am trying to improve):)

Thanks for the review ,lee!

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See if you like the changes in second para. Could t think of anything for the first

Thanks Haraya !Your review is really valuable for me. I'll make the changes as soon as I'm able to think of better lines that could go with the rhymes%uD83D%uDE42. Thankss

Oh no that's not it. I forgot it amidst all the other faults . And these nitpicks as you call them actually gave me a chance to improve. Thanks a ...

So here! I changed what you said. Please view it again and let me know if it's better?!

Hi Lee ! Thanks for reviewing. I'll look into my faults%uD83D%uDE42

hi Haraya! thanks for reviewing. well, some things are really vague i can understand. for eg. what i meant by time sees and flies was that people around me and ...