angelwings13

This was very fun to read, but it was also very touching and warm to the heart. I would love to hear this with music! Great work.

Thanks, how do you think I should break up the paragraphs?

Thanks so much for the review. Ava is immature? At what points do you reference? I'll try to clear it up because some of the points of Ava's actions has ...

Wow, this is very touching and deep. I loved it. I don't see any major mistakes and I don't really have much to critique about it. Keep up the great ...

A little bit more descriptive and an evident plot to where the story is leading would be a very good draw in for me. I had mixed emotions on this ...

Very strong and realistic in my opinion. The characters were very believable and held on to my attention though some parts were a bit predictable.

This was really gripping. I loved it! Some mistakes were already pointed out by previous reviewers so I don't feel the need to reiterate that. This really held my interest, ...

We sat at a booth in the far back where the light was low and an emergency exit loomed near. I checked the clock and it was already 1 am. ...

He swiftly turned the corner and made it out to the busy streets. I glanced in the mirror and saw the white van not far behind. A window on the ...

I'll check our writing and review! Thanks for reviewing my work. Yeah, I was rushing in class to get it posted, but i'm going to go back in an edit ...

I added a full portion more on the first part (which is his childhood). I'm going to remake this into a journal like form and its going to switch from ...

I'm going to post all my writing up top in my first post.

@Angela 1. Thanks for the tidbit, I didn't know the beginning was a bit vague. I'll clarify that up later. 2. I'll correct that error 3. He is expressing his ...

Thanks for the read. I might tweak the opening sentence so that it flows much better. I'm going to post part 1 of the story in a bit. I'm very ...

This was stellar! I really enjoyed reading this and I haven't seen the YouTube Video, but now i'm wanting to. p.s. You upload a profile picture by going to my ...