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Hello- First off, I really enjoyed how you set up the story. It really shed light on the rest of story and as the story went on. I also liked ...

Your Title is so intriguing. I couldn't resist reading this. You should totally write more of this! The only things that could be improved, is that the last paragraph is ...

I really like how you described multiple inventions of ancient China. It was very interesting. I am a little confused about how the stranger who saved him said “I am ...

Are you going to write more? This is fantastic! The end is so intriguing, I REALLY want more ;). I love your eloquence. It makes the story so interesting. But ...

I really enjoyed your story, it was very descriptive and engaging. I like that it was in first person, it was very interesting because of that. I also like how ...

Your grammar and punctuation was very impressive. I also liked how descriptive you are, I could totally imagine every part you wrote about. I enjoyed how the it was sort ...