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Re: Fool For Love
Hi again. :) My big issue with this was the grammar again. I Can't Belive I Go Again Believe. This line, even with the rest of the stanza, doesn't make ...
Aug 24, 2011 -
Re: Im Too Young For Love
Hi! I'm Kat and I'll be one of your reviewers today. Poetry's not my strong suite, even if it is in a novel, and I haven't reviewed in a million ...
Aug 21, 2011 -
Re: What It's Like to Be a Nobody
You didn't put an 'r' in everybody like there should be. Oh, and there should be a comma after 'sweet' in stanza one, line six. :) That's my only real ...
Oct 29, 2010 -
Re: You Wanna Try That Again?
Personally, I loved this, although I'm not sure what pick-up line you're talking about. My only critique is the double "thats," which has already been pointed out several times. As ...
Aug 30, 2010 -
Re: Distraught: Chapter 1
Hi! Sorry it took me so long to get to this. he definitely appeared to have an air of confidence about him. How did he appear to have an air ...
Jul 4, 2010 -
Re: How to Live - Chapter One
Hi Xirenia!I loved this but mainly because I can identify with it. But it was decked out with all this white minimalistic crap. That's exactly how most therapist's waiting rooms ...
Feb 1, 2010 -
Re: Breena (Four)
Sasha gave all the nitpicks so I'm going to talk about Warren and Foster. I honestly have no idea which one I like better. Foster's more mysterious but Warren's really ...
Oct 16, 2009 -
Re: Breena (Three)
I apologize again. I'm being lazy. Once again, everyone has good suggestions. As for the beginning: I'd describe how she feels around Foster. What does she feel about him being ...
Oct 16, 2009 -
Re: Breena (Two)
To be honest, everything I noticed was already pointed out by the other reviews. The first part of the story (the beginning) confused me a little with what the class ...
Oct 16, 2009 -
Re: Breena (One)
Hi Jayleigh! I'm a little rusty so I apologize in advance. “What are you doing after school?” The only problem with this that I have is that it doesn't grab ...
Oct 14, 2009 -
Re: Fright
I have to agree with Vox. It's good it was an eye-opener for you, though. Why didn’t we know about it? He probably didn't want his problems to be broadcasted ...
Oct 11, 2009 -
Re: Do these even exist?
Sarah Dessen is good, as someone else said. I love books by Laurie Halse Anderson. Fever 1793 is the first book of hers that I read. It's historical fiction but ...
Jul 21, 2009 -
Re: This Is What I Wish I Could Say To You [1]
Hi Sofi. First of all, I want to say that this was really well written. I only have a few nitpicks. I had fun that morning. Helping Mum decide what ...
May 9, 2009 -
Re: April
Hi LibraLoo! I'm Kat and I'll be your reviewer today. :) First of all, welcome to YWS! Second of all, thanks for following the 2:1 policy. "DAMMIT!" Just a little ...
May 3, 2009 -
Re: Meave's Journal
Hi Eco! I'm really sorry it took me this long to get to this. The first, hatred and denial ; Since you capitalized the other two stages and the semi-colon ...
Apr 18, 2009
