alohajuice

u have to change 'made' to mad. the lyrics arent that bad. no line really pops in my head though. maybe i'd have to listen to it with the tune. ...

the title is a little confusing. and whenever you say 'to die a dream of death' breaths should be breathes. i liked ur use of the word 'sanctions' it gave ...

[i]A/N- Dragons are circling Now mermaids are singing i liked these descriptions. the whole poem was nice as a whole and dreamy feeling. there were def traces of fire and ...

sweetly written and nice imagery. except it should be season's wonder :) its great and it feels true to summer but do trees actually blow? it doesn't seem to fit ...

it seemed weird to me using stale to describe your body. but it was a nice poem. it was a bit bare feeling. didnt bring much out of me. i ...

the chorus reminded me of All Around Me by flyleaf and mostly gotta find you by joe jonas. i def can relate to the feeling of the song, but the ...

um very very graphic. most graphic thing ive read in a while. it was a bit disturbing it felt more psychotic than angry. you seemed more angry at yourself and ...

wow youre very young and i think you already have a nice writing style coming along. i totally get the emotion you're conveying here. i am relating right now. sort ...