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That is a beautiful piece of writing. I love your descriptions, they're really great. I also loved that you didn't stick to the traditional cliche of an angel, and that ...

That was great! Description was good, characterization was good, diction was good, I loved it. I really didn't notice any grammar things, and I thought that as a hook it ...

Alright I'm going to start off with the boring grammar stuff. Night was falling over the badlands of Artaris, the last of the sun’s brilliance stained the land , deep ...

I absolutely loved this. Your imagery is fantastic. I hope you're writing more? Let me know if/when you do. \ Just two little spelling errors. But now she feels nothing, ...

Alright I made a bunch of edits and my thoughts are at the bottom. he quickly shone a flashlight beam around the shadowy basement, as was his ritual to do ...

I really loved this story. The hook is great, and I think you can really get somewhere with it. Your battle scene was perfect, I've always had trouble with writing ...