aestar101

chapter 1 It was impossible.She couldn't love him.Could she? Well she absolutely did. Did he love her too? SHe wold ask him later. Lillian is my name. I am 13 ...

You live, I die I'm the truth, You're a lie I warm the world as you remain cold I live forever as you steadily grow old I'm fire, You're ice ...

Lisa hates herself and she hates her body. She really hates her mother for making her go to another one of her stupid parties but she utterly despises The Dress. ...

I compare him to Boo Radley from To Kill A Mockingbird, everyone thought that Boo was weird and scary becasue he never left his house, but he was missunderstood. Boo ...

Hypocrite You know something I can't stand? When pig-nosed hypocrites make faces at the wide world, stick thier tongues out, roll thier eyes, and rub thier chins, and try to ...

Loved it! It was mysterious and had a steady rhythm. I felt like I was rocking back and forth by reading your poem. I thought it had a romantic element ...

Intro First, I liked the poem. I liked the patern at the start of every stanza. It give sthe poem a certain type of flow. The Critique You never asked ...

Icaruss I congratulate you on a job well done! :D This was great. The whole story was steady from beginning to end. You should be proud. I was slightly disappointed ...

Basiclly the same thing I said in the first review. Everything is so realistic. There is just a no- nonsense element to your story. Ever see Forrest Gump? Ashley reminds ...

This is excellent. It is all something I could see happening in real life. I was automatically imagined a movie coming out in my mind. I liked the professionalism in ...

This chapter was good but there was a couple things I need to mention. Big Gap Why is there such a big time space between the morning and the evening. ...

I really liked this it was very interesting. I agree with Sam about beefing up the intro. There is books that I don't finish because the beginning doesn't hook me. ...

What the heck? A fourteen year old losing her virginity?! :shock: What is the world coming to? Why should women degrade themselves like that after many before them were fighting ...

I liked this poem. I liked the message. The rythmn was great. The imagry was beautiful. I think there is nothing worng with it my favorate parts: The sharp rocks ...

I liked it. But it seemed like you were taking to the person that dumped you instead of writing the poem. Try talking got him, but in a poetic way. ...