adri-rox_94

this was pretty good. It started out good and ended good. i mean at first i was completely, well sort of confused, but then i understood it more and more. ...

um...well. this peice was very deep. It was a little obscure but in a good way. All stories need a little obscurity to make it interesting. I loved how you ...

this is story needs a little tweaking and its a little confusing, but it was pretty funny! but also, sometimes in a story, you shouldn't have a lot of characters ...

wow......your story is really awesome! the very beginning of the story and the first sentence was a really enticing start. i almost envy your writing! i loved your description. It ...

wow....ur writing in this poem was really good!it was too deep for me to understand, but it was really awesome!and i liked the first was the most understandable to me. ...

i didnt read your whole story because i lost interest but as constructive criticism, i suggest that you be more clear on your details and your beginning was similiar to ...