Zrillis

Also I dont want to say to much but later on youll discover that Fews personally changes based on what Jayden needs it to be at that moment. As i ...

This was helpful. I have to go back and make my point more clear. What I meant to have Portrayed is Few spends all the time explaining about the castle ...

Though if you keep posted I have decided the full chapter will definitely be up. As i havent even gotten to the Spirit of the Lying forest which is what ...

Thank you for this feed back and fixes. As for the shortness like i said in my author's notes, this is only the start of chap 1. I am going ...

Thank you for this review. I worked hard to make Iris teo sided as per her character. She is one of the most fun charecters to write for.

I read this and first i will do a shallow review. Your structure seems broken. Alot of run ons, misspellings and grammar errors. Overall your point comes across decently but ...

I accidentally sent early so im going to make up a new review as i dont know how to erase

Thank you for this feedback. I can summerize my long reply in a few sentences because I have had this discussion before I have been told many times I put ...

I have mixed feelings about this. I like it but its also almost too vague for me. The meaning is clear but the context and imagery is slightly lacking Overall ...

As for the "unnecessary scenes you've mentioned I will give a look at it and maybe tweak but for this moment Im leaving them in. The randon capital letters and ...