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Re: The Greatest Mystery of the 21st Century (There is a Murder Involved Too… SHHHHHH….) Part 2
Hi Khushi! This is Zenith with a short review. I love everything about this story. Most of all, I love the unlikely narrator ( but you can tell as much ...
Jun 29, 2024 -
Re: The clown with the artificial doll eyes
Hi vampricone! Zenith here with a short review. First things first, I would like to get a few edit suggestions out of the way. I have re-written some of the ...
Mar 10, 2023 -
Re: Dark Side of the Coffee Machine 0: The BIG boss!
Hi Fox! This is Zenith with a short review. Firstly, I have a question. What does the words in big black bold symbolize? Is Jeden the name of one of ...
Mar 10, 2023 -
Re: Happily ever after
Hey Ellie! Zenith here for a review. I am back on this site after many many months. So, needless to say, I'm rusty and probably won't be able to do ...
Nov 5, 2022 -
Re: Hayley’s story-Clowns,Magic,Murder and Lies
Hey vampricone6783! Zenith here for a short review. You have tagged this as a short story, but your work doesn't qualify as a story. It's more like a prologue. Now ...
May 13, 2022 -
Re: The Mountain (5)
Hey zekcede! Zenith here for a short review. I would start by saying that all of the useful suggestions I had to offer(which weren't much to begin with) had already ...
Apr 11, 2021 -
Re: The world
Hey akanbright! Zenith here for a review. Your poem falls in the short and sweet category. I like the main theme that you've tried to portray. The world is indeed ...
Apr 11, 2021 -
Re: The Perfect Crime
Hey BIHXY! Zenith here for a review. First of all, from what I understand, this poem mocks the idea of a marriage in which the man drags an innocent woman ...
Jul 16, 2020 -
Re: The sea, a piece of my heart
Hey MoonIris! Zenith here to review your poem. First of all, I would like to begin with what I like about this poem. It conjures a really peaceful image of ...
Jun 29, 2020 -
Re: Brown Bear [part 2]
Hey there! Zenith here for a review. So this is a continuation of an earlier piece titled the same. You have tried to portray the heartbreak felt by the characters ...
Mar 31, 2020 -
Re: deleted for revision
Hey there! Zenith here for a short review. I liked the way you began the story with elves scoffing on the existence of fairies. It's a good way to catch ...
Mar 31, 2020 -
Re: This is how it feels
Hey there! Zenith here for a review. First of all, let's go into the overall subject analysis. You have chosen a common theme- you have tried to put forward the ...
Mar 31, 2020 -
Re: ENIGMA...
Hey Theia! Zenith here with a short review. I'll start with things you can improve upon and then to what I liked best about ENIGMA. First of all, you need ...
Mar 23, 2020 -
Re: The Choice
Hey there! Zenith here for a review. You have an interesting story here about two lawyers. Stories involving lawyers are always fun because they are smart people. So I was ...
Dec 1, 2019 -
Re: When I Was Anna - 4
Hey Carlito! So first of all I liked how focused Summer is with her band performance. The character you have developed upto now seemed too nervous everytime Micah is even ...
Jun 16, 2019
