Zephyr

The only issue I have with this poem is that it is too scattered and unfocused. Where you have good images and beautiful phrases (magnets forsooth) you lack a general ...

It's unique and well written, with a good premise, but I feel like your description (while excellent, by the way) sometimes seems too forced and overly elaborate. It's good to ...

The poem has a good focus and I think using the guitar as a device to concentrate the entire poem around is a very good idea. Just a note, it's ...

Though there is a good premise, I feel like this is lacking something- which may, in part, be due to the fact that it is a chapter and not a ...