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Zebobez

  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Equivalent Worlds - Chapter Five

    I usually use a rating system, giving grades to various parts of the writing. Let me tell you now, I grade harshly, but when I give a compliment expect me ...

    Mar 26, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Science Fiction Re: Mecto Amore - Chapter 1

    Your descriptions are wonderful but your action scenes and plotting need work to sound professional, though they aren't bad by any means. Character descriptions: A Lacking the plus sign even ...

    Mar 15, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Ascension: Corso 9 (The Myriad book 1)

    The transition between normal village and spooky village was sudden, and it wasn't explained enough, I thought the main character was having a dream sequence because of how sudden and ...

    Mar 13, 2017
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, Fanfiction Re: The FTL Chronicles - Chapter 2

    The action scene at the beginning was poorly written, but it got the message across and I don't think it was a failure as much as it was a good ...

    Mar 11, 2017
  • Short Story » General, Realistic Re: Mr. Adkins [RC: R1]

    All three of your questions have positive answers, none of your concerns were manifested. Your description of the willows and the garden in the woods was particularly well-worded. However, at ...

    Mar 11, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Realistic Re: Liz + Zac (2.1)

    I'm not going to analyze writing style because it works. I liked the tension from the main character running into her school enemies (I assume, I haven't read any other ...

    Mar 11, 2017


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