Zainab

I liked it. The prosey style seemed to express (to me) how the narrator is exploding with love for this person, can't wait to get the emotion onto the page. ...

Haha I was so pleasantly surprised by the ending. Only nitpicks are that I'd remove some of the commas between lines as they break the flow when I read. At ...

I feel like this speaks of unrequited affection. While it's dramatic in some ways ("immersing", "grab your attention", wanting to consume knowledge about the other person) it's also so soft ...

I really liked the medical metaphor to show how people can hook themselves onto "life support", hoping for a loved one. I particularly liked: "I cursed my own reflection, / ...