Yrael

I think this has a very well-written description, although, it might be better if you could describe things such as the guards, and I would also add a small detail ...

Alright, I think I shall only critique the Prologue, at least for now: The faint sound of footsteps echoed through the trees. Okay... this is an odd sentence.. You really ...

Back on the thought of description: This description was quite improved. You did allow a visual of everything that took place, but I still think you could kick it up ...

I really think you need to give these demons more detail; physical features as well as mental ones. You did cover the mental ones, but with very broad terms. These ...

Too me, it was merely a convesational piece. It didn't seem to be a poem. I guess ot someone else it is, but for me it wasn't. You're obviously talking ...

Whoa the rhyming was ways off. It could have been very good if it hadn't been for that because you actually used imagery. The worse rhyming combination was "totality" and ...

Let's be truthful here: Fontroy, it seems as if you spend no time checking over your work. I check over my work anywhere from five to twelve times before I ...