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Hello, Rachel, and welcome to YWS. Nice so far, just a few suggestions. Grammar is in red . Others are in blue . First of all, i think you need ...

Deep poem. Grammar is in red . Others are in blue. * I get what you are going for, but is just seems a little incomplete without an indirect object ...

Overall, good job. Grammar is in red. Other is in blue. I would tell you if I could - But now a rose just ain’t so sweet. I would tell ...

I won't really review on content, because i have yet to read the 1st chapter, but on everything else. Grammar is in red . 2 My parents hadn’t returned home ...

Really nice. I shall review paragraph by paragraph. 5’8 and beautiful, Alice pranced down the side walk letting people admire her beauty. She had a slim, perfect body, she was ...

Nice and emotional. Grammar is in red. Battles raging on, people dying for no reason.- arguable point.Some may believe otherwise.But i like, it gives a different view. Evil people springing ...

Hello.I'm Jojo, and i will review your paper. mwwaahahhaa. Here we go. My Stimulus package Nice title. There is a problem that persists in this great country, The United States ...

Good, just a few things. XIII. Misfortune “My truck wouldn’t start,” Sadie chattered , shivering in the bitter cold; she wasn’t yet prepared for this type of winter. “Come inside, ...

Well.I'm a Nigerian.. but i haven't really heard of anything bad going on. There was a president change, wasn't there? Anyhow.. as said above, I can see your zeal and ...

Not bad. :wink: Just a few grammatical errors (in red), and structural errors(in blue). Pagan rituals to compliment the season, to bring about the solstice to give us a reason. ...

One Reason Why People Aren’t Better Than People. 1) Really? I mean, really? Has it all come down to this? Taking sides of gender or whatever? This is ridiculous—I hope ...

Really refreshing poem.Not all about gloomy and depressing love. i like it. Just one or two things. Summertime, she says to me: We skip away to drip ice cream on ...

5 Reasons why people who don't make "5 Reasons why somethingsomething are better than everyone else" threads are better than everyone else. Nate's idea. But I wanna do one. The ...

I have to commend you. For you did something that most people try to avoid. You used second person. ( You blank blank, then you blank blank) Very bold, and ...

Hello! and welcome to YWS. Just a few suggestions. I tell him I want to die He says please don't cry I say why shouldn't I? There's no hope left ...