Xunnamius

This is the first of your three I read, but I had to let this one sink in a bit before commenting. I believe its been stewing in my crazy ...

Oh no! Incognito went and killed all my glorious nitpicks :lol: I'll just comment on the story as a whole. A very interesting topic, and one that most writers (around ...

The Talisman. H-A-T-E doesn't even begin to describe the boredom I felt. My friend told me it was so good, and would get better as it went along... but I ...

Finally, I get a chance to check out your work! I'll start with the little nitty-gritty things, since those are my favorites! I'd never expected to drop like this. Strikes ...

*The monster approached the thread... and tore it to pieces! Then, as the pieces of literature fell back to the floor, he brought them all back together again!* The night ...

I won't go bother pointing out the structural/aesthetic faults, since, especially if you read my review on the first chapter, you already get the point. This leaves me more time ...

He was hunched over the podium, squinting through the cascade of light, trying to see the heads of the six hundreds boys in blue suits who were all waiting for ...

*writewatiwant* pointed out most of the nitpicks, so I'll just comment on the whole thing itself. Enthralling, another piece I could read from start to finish effortlessly. Your style is ...

I printed out your story (back2back) and read it before I went to sleep yesterday... and I've got to say... even though the story was built simply (that's not necessarily ...

That was defiantly a fast paced ride! Before I knew it, I was at the bottom :smt101 Lets see if I can whip out some advanced critique powers (warning, may ...

Society on the prowl. Not much I could find in terms of errors -- it's a pretty solid poem. :) I love works like this, since they talk about issues ...

Time gives us a present, Even a past and a future. Why the "even"? It's as if you expect the reader to be surprised; that doesn't make sense, because it ...

I agree with most of Roo's points. Awesome story by the way. Finally, a new, unique idea is forming! When I finished reading this, I went straight to the prologue ...

Wow. I liked that a lot! Great work! I've gotta agree with Chinchilla... the wolves just disappeared! Aww! Where'd they go?! Good ol' sibling rivalry! Great stuff! Develop the stories ...

Interesting. The way your style flows is mysterious... but in a good way. It's a little difficult to follow at first, but it really emphasizes the "mood" of the story, ...