Wolf

Part Two! GENERAL COMMENTS: 1. I've noticed you repeatedly make the same grammar mistake with your dialogue. For example: [Incorrect] "Hello." He said. [Correct] "Hello," he said. 2. More on ...

Thank you all so much for your reviews! :D I'll fix the nit-picky things right away and then get to work on adding more characterization and more description of time ...

thanks, i really appreciate your review. (: that's funny, i just recently started guitar lessons (about two months ago). i see what you mean about seeing your own limitations ... ...

Thanks guys! Your reviews were great. :) I've fixed the little things and will be revising the middle section again to try to give it more relevance to the story. ...

Thanks! I appreciate your review, especially the part about Edward Cullen. ;P I'll work on that. Why are they speaking french? This is maths. Is it set in france? No, ...

Many thanks to your both! :D I'm actually really surprised that it's not as terrible as I thought. I will be fixing the grammatical mistakes right away, and thank-you both ...

Awee, thanks muffin. :)

Why hello, Gwening! Good to see you back on YWS. ^^ First thing I noticed... ... is that you stole my title. Ah well, we'll sort it out at swordplay ...

Thank you all very much for your excellent reviews! Skye is fourteen, just so everyone knows. There. Most of you guessed right. :) In case anyone's wondering, I won't be ...

Thanks, bkwrm! :D I'm glad you like it, and thanks for the nit-picks!

Part Two is up, 'yall! :D ... so, um, please review. ^^

*glomps Sam and Alainna* Thank you both soooo much! Great crits. ^^ I'll keep in mind what you've suggested and fix the nit-picks right away. What song is that from? ...

:shock: Wow, I'm getting a ton of reviews! Squee! aestar101 > added to the list. LolitaRose > yus! I'm so glad that you think she's "an average girl, but something ...

Muchas gracias to all three of you! :D Cool beginning, but part of me is looking out for the cliches that I think are coming next. Here's hoping my search ...

Hey there! :D I'm Wolf, as you might have realized. I haven't got the time for a very good critique right now -- this will just be some basic points. ...