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  • Article / Essay » Politics, Review Re: Gay Rights in Russia

    This is really shocking news! I knew homosexuality iss considered a crime in Russia, but I didn't know the consequences were so extreme. My heart goes out to the Russian ...

    Dec 22, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Humor, Fantasy Re: Quest Unable Chapter One (Rough Draft)

    I like the concept of a bard telling the story, but sometimes, the voice gets too ramblish, like for instance - when you talk about your characters. That much of ...

    Dec 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Traumatized Memories

    This is a very meaningful poem. I really love the way you have expressed the soldier's internal battle. I was expecting a veteran of the Vietnam War or something, but ...

    Dec 10, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: The Necromancer: Prologue

    First of all, I find books which begin with so much history and backstory very off-putting. The prologue, I think should be action-filled, and should draw the reader in, give ...

    Dec 9, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Action / Adventure Re: x

    This piece is very well penned, and I do like your descriptions, but somehow, I thought it was a bit ramblish. I mean, if I read each scene bit by ...

    Dec 9, 2013
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The sky - blue sky

    Your use of the phrase "sky blue sky" is very cool :) It reminds me of the song by Wilco with the same name. (sky blue sky) I would suggest ...

    Dec 8, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Clock

    This is a beautiful concept. I've never thought of it this way before - personifying time and making it take offence at the clock's ticking. I think you ought to ...

    Dec 8, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: These are the Children

    This poem is absolutely beautiful

    Dec 8, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Writing

    This is a very simple, but meaningful poem. I think it's something every aspiring writer can relate to. It's well penned too :) By the way, I think in line ...

    Dec 8, 2013


I feel like it will be absolute hotdog water, but oh well. It's just a draft.
— Charm