Winterhawk393

oh okay i see here about the Hare business. cool =)

yeah, i'm one of those grammar nazis when it comes to literary work. everyday talking or texting idc much, but i'm a little OCD about writing. but anyways, to each ...

totally agree with the balance of show and tell. good way to put it!

thanks! this is actually some of the best advice I've gotten so far. and yeah, I was wondering about the headmaster and how much creep to add... i'll see what ...

yes abigor is their father. that will become more clear as the work continues. and thank you! I hope this is as fun to read as it is for me ...

thanks for the insight, even though you didn't enjoy it =) to each their own, I suppose. and thanks for pointing out the repetition at the beginning, I didn't even ...

they're in England - which I'm thinking of changing cuz I don't know ANYTHING about the way brits talk lol. and yeah I mention it in an earlier chapter(at least ...

no this is not a house it's a boarding school. a lot of the back story is explained in the previous chapters. and yeah it's sort of going to be ...

thank you! feel free to give suggestions/ideas =)

basically perff. I love when you say "a scream clawed its way up my throat" hehe. you must learn me in the ways of your brain. we will discuss this ...

whoa that's weird. yeah I always proofread my work before I send it to anyone or post it anywhere. when I went to edit it there were already spaces in ...

thanks for the advice! =)

love this! can't wait to read more! and I love the way you write =)

okay, I don't really have much to correct. but here's something: "Thank god that the song wasn’t powerful enough to pull it towards him at this distance," - I think ...

I tots agree with basically everything everyone else said. this is way different than the stuff I've read from you before, a good different =D And I like the title, ...