Wiggy

Great job, jiggy! As others have stated, I'm becoming a big fan of your work too. You really have the talent for pounding the words on a page and capturing ...

Well, xanthan, I loved this poem! You did an awesome job painting a picture, as has been said, but you probably could have done it with words just as beautiful, ...

This is kind of a scattered poem. It has a lot of lines that are way too long such as This man that lives in me is a wise man ...

There's just a few grammatical errors that I'm sure you can find. Also, try to make your dialogue a little more realistic. It kind of sounds stilted a little (at ...

Excellent poem as always Liz. I only have a few corrections. humor so phony, I can’t help but laugh Add a comma after laugh. your mask, and was touched by ...

Great job bubbles! I saw this as voted best poem and I went to check it out. You did a really great job on this and I can't think of ...

Not to be mean, but don't get too cocky. Everyone can use a little work. Everyone . Which includes you. And me. And everyone on this site! Heck, this is ...

Jack I got it! Basically you feel like you're taking and not giving enough or something? The line "As he struggled toward the sunset" perhaps means that you're struggling to ...

Very good, gummy! I'm such a big fan of your strong use of language (when I can understand it lol :D). This one makes us really loathe the guy. Misty ...

This was an...interesting prologue type thingy, but way too many adjectives and definitely a lot of words used that weren't needed. Write what you need. It's better to have one ...

Arrriiii (singsong voice)!!! Awesomeness job girlie! Keep writing like that! Everyone took care of crits about language and grammar and such. Great job! :D

Um, could you maybe...spruce up the story a little? I tried to get half-way through and I just couldn't. It was hard to read because it just seemed like they're ...

Umm, this was a nice poem, but not great. The rhythm was definitely awkward, and I really didn't get the last stanza either. Nice try! Also, if you work on ...

Hey gummy! Great, great poem. I loved the images in it. It created a beautiful picture of daring and love an such. The only problem I had was with these ...

DD, I keep promising you I'll crit your work and I never do. So I'm critting this one now! (I promise I'll get to the Chair-it's 12 pages though and ...