Wiggy

Hey there Grant! First off, I can see you're new to YWS, so welcome! I'm Wiggy, and though I haven't been around so much lately (which is entirely my own ...

Oober cute! Want more soon! :) I will do a proper crit later, promise. :) I just love your writing Ari!

That was creepy! I really liked it, though, for some odd perverted reason! XD It's like that sort of "quiet horror" that sends chills up and down your spine, but ...

I get it, and I don't get it. I think you did a nice job with the symbolism, but the characters were just...meh. It was kind of a creepy seductive ...

I think you had a good premise for a story here, but it just wasn't believable. I understand fantasy and other things happening and stuff, but this just wasn't realistic ...

Hey Isaac! What a neat poem! I know you don't want to change this, and you don't have to, but I just wanted to remark on a few things. I ...

This definitely went waaaay too fast for me. I believe it was very well written, but I didn't understand it at all. At first I thought that this was going ...

Hey! It looks like you're sortofish new to YWS, so welcome to it! Before anyone critiques your story, I'd suggest you use some punctuation and make this a lot longer. ...

All right, first off, it'd help if you'd space out your paragraphs. This story was really hard to read because of that reason alone. There's a lot of grammar errors ...

Ooo, spooky! *shivers* I liked the mysterious tone on this, but as Dono said, I think you could definitely benefit from some description. Your wording was great on this, and ...

Hey Lucy! This wasn't too bad. You have the potential for a good storyline, but there are a few things I'd like to point out. First off, your characters were ...

I really liked this, Crys. It flowed really well for me, and the ending was what cinched it. I think the thing you could improve on is, although there may ...

It's a good beginning! I'd love to read more of it, but normally you post more than a paragraph for your story. You can edit your story by looking in ...

That was such a cute story! I really liked the presence of it--I truly felt like I was there. The only part I could find that was wrong was how ...

Finally, they got together!!!!! *dances* I was waiting for sooo long! You're a really good writer, you know. You should try to get this published! Love it! :D *pants* Next ...