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Re: Baseball
Okay, nice! Like your idea, but, to me it needs more structure. Use a thesauraus and replace some word to make them better! You should make it more intense! "It’s ...
May 7, 2009 -
Re: Fear
You've got a swell idea, you just need to develop it more. Yes, you need to add much more description and make it longer. It just tells, there is no ...
May 7, 2009 -
Re: I have no idea
Well, to start it was kind of confusing for me. This part here: Why hello there "I'm death, nice to meet you Oh your colourful hair I like colours Colourful ...
Apr 24, 2009 -
Re: The Ballad of Tommy Tucker
Wow, I really liked it! It was real nice from start to finish ( And I agree with genuine-writer, I liked how it was like a story. And about the ...
Apr 24, 2009