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WarriorOfTheBrimstone

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: And the Lights Go Out on Broadway

    As I was reading this poem, I wasn't sold on it. For most of it, I wasn't sure what you were trying to portray but then the ending came and. ...

    Jan 4, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: village of woes

    Not so sure I'm sold on this poem. It seems pretty sloppy to me, there wasn't any puncuation or capitilization, which just makes it LOOK bad. No matter how good ...

    Jan 2, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: All Clear

    I liked this poem quite a bit. I think it has the potenial to be a great poem if you extended it more. The emotions need to be fleshed out ...

    Dec 18, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: 5

    I really liked this poem, it was akward in a couple of spots with the rhyming but overall very good. The only major issue I had with it was a ...

    Dec 17, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Gnosis

    I very much liked this poem, it had a lot of very interesing imagery and I thought the rhyming couplets set off a whismical apect of the topic that was ...

    Dec 2, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: 2

    I really liked the was a very complelling point of view. I'm not sure I like the two line couplets but there are other problems besides that. First of all, ...

    Dec 1, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: In Tribute to Harry Crosby: The Mad Queen's Forever Fever

    It seems like you have some talent as a writer, but this poem does not do you justice. I thought some imagery was very good but it was erratic at ...

    Dec 1, 2008


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