VivielTwixt

The story was okay. You had a problem, so there was some form of plot. The problem is, as Story Weaver mentioned, the readers don't have a reason to care. ...

There is such great imagery here. I can't believe no one's reviewed this yet, but I guess it's because there's not much that can be fixed. I like how it's ...

I think there should be something more to this story than a beautiful woman getting stabbed. Ella's Emerald green eyes stared at the sky. Her skirt was an aqua blue ...

But what people don’t talk about, or even think about, really, is what’s before it. There is no between death. You mean between life and death, or just before death. ...

Interesting poem. It's sort of sweet but also depressing how this guy's only thoughts are his love who seems so far away. The Saturday 6-o'clock alarm sends a piercing shriek ...

Maybe it's because you've shortened it, but I didn't understand the plot of the story. I did get that Skylar was in a space station, but I didn't get the ...

The premise of this story is very interesting. I never read the forced arranged marriage thing done werewolf style. I like the way the story sarts off right in the ...

The story is well-written and the concept is interesting, too. The only thing I would recommend is that you change the second-to-last paragraph to dialogue. That would make a more ...

Liberty handed Ben the waterskin and then stepped back as he tied it to the horse. She silently watched him prepare to leave, wanting to say something that would show ...

Writers are always told "show don't tell". This story is one of the unique few where showing is not an issue. The story can using more telling though. I don't ...

You did a great job with your first chapter. It definitely catches my interest and makes me want to learn more. Writing Style I love the poem at the beginning ...

Nice job, Skins. I like that you added a conflict with between Tori and Mr.Perfect. I also liked how you found a way to bring up the mystery of Oliver's ...

I've read the all of the chapters so I'll review the entire story I've read so far. Plot At the beginning of the story, I was bored. It sounded like ...

First off, I am not , I repeat, I am not the best reviewer of historical fiction, but I'll try. And I start... Plot I need to know the main ...

Hmm. Definitely not what I was expecting. Writing Style You're writing style is strong because it's subtle, and yet straightforward at the same time. The absence flowery language definitely helps ...