ViktorZaltys

Thank you for your review, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll keep those tenses in mind when I edit it. :)

Hey, I'm mainly looking for feedback on how to make this story better. I haven't done line by line editing to fix grammar, so I hope that it's readable. Any ...

Thank you for your review, I'll definitely keep the boring grammar structure in mind for future writings. :)

Thank you, I honestly was planning on this being a one and done, but after your kind words I definitely think I'll try to continue the story. :)