VeraWinters

hi there I don't really like this for the reason that the rhyme is boring. fine mine, etc repetitive. I don't really get this, something about a girl. sorry i ...

This is okay. In a way it is a refeshingly simplae peice with a intresting message and good flow. But it also a bit of a wallow post. Your just ...

I actually like this. I did not think I would but it is kind of refreshing and strong. Keep writing like you mean it Vera

Good I really like this. A nice turn on the avadrede love poem with a good flow and wording. Good Job Keep writing like you mean it Vera

Id also like to mention that this does not seem like a R rated piece. It has no harsh language, sex or possibly offending themes. Just like to mention. Keep ...

wow, really great, very lyrical and textured, well done keep writing like you mean it Vera

Very good, It's interesting, but it does feel like a first attempt. Try and go over it agaun and try to make it more polished. The idea feels kind of ...

This is very smart you have a great use of adjectives you use adjectives isn a really unique which many writers wok for. it is dark in parts it also ...

for something that could be very cliched, this is very good