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  • Short Story » General, General Re: It Happens

    The first time I read through this two things really got to me: your imagery is fantastic and you're a big fan, whether on purpose or by accident, of alliterations. ...

    Aug 1, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Sleep Driver

    I see the rawness of this piece. We're inside the mind of seriously confused man, obviously he's frustrated and since this "blackout" thing has happened before. This is the third ...

    May 10, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Of Gold, Gleam, Metal; or, a poem containing a play

    This is a very new style and I totally dig it! never before have i seen a poem laid out like a play involving scenes like this, it's very novel ...

    Apr 22, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Our Apocalypse

    This poem just emanates all things dark and demonic! Shadows gather poisonously onto flesh, as the hissing pentacle rises again upon the sepulchre doors of the damned. This is my ...

    Apr 22, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Youth in My Eyes

    This sounds very personal, and very real. It became extremely emotional and the turning point really hit me when the bit about the masks began; suicide thoughts. It's intense, like ...

    Apr 22, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Memory

    Panic starts to rise, I feel dirty, uncomfortable. The music fades and you slip Away, and I flee to my safe zone. This part right here is very realistic. People ...

    Apr 22, 2010


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