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Re: Earth Descended: 1.06
Thanks! I know the tense and third person can be weird to some people, but it felt right for this story so I went with it. I'll fix those little ...
Oct 25, 2019 -
Re: Earth Descended: 1.05
Ooh yeah, should probably be more consistent about when things are painful. Thanks so much for the tip!
Oct 21, 2019 -
Re: Earth Descended: 1.05
I don't know what's up with my notifications, but I'm so sorry I didn't see your other reviews until today! It's good to know that I'm finally settling into something ...
Oct 21, 2019 -
Re: A Fool's Bucket - Ch. 1.3
Hmm... I guess for vibes I usually start with personification and simile? Like, if there's no immediately playful object on Buck's treehouse (though in that case, I think the very ...
Oct 9, 2019 -
Re: Earth Descended: 1.03
Thankfully things will pick up in the next two chapters. Probably it would have been a good idea to just combine 1.02 and 1.03. I think Ming's perspective could have ...
Oct 8, 2019 -
Re: Earth Descended: 1.02
Yeah, I'm a but worried that I'll fall into the same trap as last LMS, where the travel time to get from point a to point b really bogs things ...
Oct 7, 2019 -
Re: Earth Descended: 1.01
Yeah I think I have a little less idea of how to start this story than I did with Conics, and it definitely shows in the things that I chose ...
Sep 27, 2019 -
Re: Earth Descended: 1.01
Hmmm yeah the face stuff will probably go away just because this is basically the scene with the most people in it ever, but I'll work on the pacing and ...
Sep 26, 2019 -
Re: The Digital Man
There is actually like a whole season about digital torture I'm so sorry.
Aug 28, 2019 -
Re: The Hero's Brother (42)
Hmmm... I think, if we had heard more about the Comtesse from the beginning--rumors, histories, more time in Whisper's headspace, etc.--then it might have made her seem more like the ...
Aug 26, 2019 -
Re: Lohikarmen: A tale of humans and dragons (Chapter 8: A new home)
Hmm I'm not sure how likely it would be for the same mutation to pop up totally independently, and equally unsure about how that would even fit into this narrative. ...
Aug 24, 2019 -
Re: Honest Depiction - Ch 3
Haha yeah that's exactly how I wanted to characterize Matt. Glad that got across well. Thanks!
Aug 15, 2019 -
Re: Honest Depiction - Ch 2
Unfortunately I have another chapter before we get any repeat appearances from William or Cam, but you might find a new perspective on what's happened already. Thanks so much for ...
Aug 5, 2019 -
Re: Honest Depiction - Ch 1
Thank you!
Jul 27, 2019 -
Re: Honest Depiction - Ch 1
No worries! I'm glad you liked it.
Jul 23, 2019
