Velvet.whispers

To Pgsgirl7 and iCarlyfan, read Keats and you'll understand that anglophone poetry is not about reality or what "makes sense", but about what manages to create a mental image, an ...

Here goes chronologically: I'm afraid that the stanza is not, in my opinion better without the suddenly, because otherwise the rhythm is too regular and conventional which makes the stanza ...

Black sailed tears my young one is a metaphor for tears as ships with black sails!! And no, it's not a typo, the apostrophe indicates the fact I have voluntarily ...

Wow, those spelling mistakes are absolutely shameful, i think that's my cue to go to bed!! I'm glad you enjoyed this, the punctuation of the last verse is a choice ...

I'm not sure if we're supposed to justify some our choices here or not. I do really like the idea of spacing out the quote rather than having it just ...

This is nice, it has rhythm and a rather sing-song quality to it! And confusing people is a quality not a fault!! Keep writing!