Vasticity

This is a very funny, and true, piece of work. I like every bit of it, and I hate to be the guy who does the serious review, :x but ...

Hello there. Your story has potential, but you make strange choices in formatting. For example, when you open a how-to-write book, one of the first things they say is, don't ...

First off, I like it! It's very interestingly formatted and written. There's only a few things that don't work. they (the leaves) make their annual trip to the ground. We ...

I like it! :D Kind of an odd premise for a poem, but aren't all ideas for poems that way? I wish it were longer, though. It seems to short ...

It's very interesting, and well-written. I can't really see any errors, except that it's too short. :( So write more, and keep writing! :mrgreen:

I am intrigued, and would read if anything else was posted regarding this. Anyway, whenever I review something, I usually find something wrong with it. Man after man fell the ...

You don't do the comma thing in this one! Yay! I only see two things wrong: I’m a murderer, and every murderer can tell how someone was killed, I really ...

This chapter was as good as the first, but you're still doing that comma thing. Add commas where they need to be added, such as here: “Now run along you ...

This isThe Man stands next to me trying to feel what he could not. interesting so far. But there are certain issues... leaning over their desks’ desks. There isn't an ...

This is a very interesting beginning to a story, and I'm looking forward to reading the rest, if you ever post it. Anyway, I agree with some of the stuff ...

Wow, I sure wasn't expecting the part at the end. :shock: Anyhoo, in terms of errors, you don't add commas in many places. For example: What about you Kashmere? What ...

I am shocked and amazed that the other reviewers were not noticing the things I did. First off, post this in advanced critiques and rate it R, okay? Secondly, a ...

Very good! Although I do agree with the first reviews, if it's sort of a 1st draft-type thing, then I'll allow it to pass. My only advice? Make it longer. ...

Liked this a lot!! Anyhoo... You certainly paint a picture, and I can't really see any spelling errors, so... there's nothing wrong with it. I'm looking forward to the continuing ...

Hello! :D I like it, but there's a few issues... Sometimes, People wonder capatalizing people is unessecary. You think, why am i happy? Capatalize the I... You cant feel yourself ...