Vasticity

This is very well done. It has a good beat, an interesting story behind it, nice rhyming, all that. There is one problem that I discovered with it, however, which ...

Hey. Normally I'm not one for poems, but this came off really well and you did a good job with it. I just have a few problems. a lot of ...

Hi. This whole situation with your plot and everything intrigues me, but the problem is that sometime I think the dialog and the narration seems a bit strange, or unrealistic. ...

Hey. This had an interesting plot, and you seemed to pull it off well, I guess I just had a few problems with the basic structure of the story. First ...

I've always been intrigued by movies or books that capture the essence of a ghost story and make into something that truly sends chills up your back. This did that. ...

Hi. I really liked this. Interesting premise, interesting characters, and some great description. This seems to be my type of story, but the problem is that you seem to be ...

okay. First off, your formatting is so off, I don't even know if I can certify this as a script. Secondly, this is so long, that I almost quit reading ...

I like it! A lot! I'm not usually one for poems, but this was very interesting. 'cept for one thing: Well, you've got the gist This is kind of an ...

Hey. I liked this, I guess there's just a few things I have problems with.... like, for instance, all these things: 1. Formatting (Ext-Evening. The sun is beginning to dip ...

Ok, this is an interesting story, not really my type, but interesting. But here's the deal. Your script format is OFF. Way off. Here's all the basics: Lily- So, um, ...

This is kind of confusing, but I'm sure all will be cleared up once the story begins. So let's begin! It was an ugly morning, Sunday I think. There should ...

This is a really awesome poem. It's got great structuring, perfect rhyming, an interesting storyline, and a good beat. The cuts in my paper thin, paper skin Normally, I'm not ...

Ok. Let's start. I like this poem, it's very structured and well written, but there's an issue. I used to go out at sea by night, when the skies were ...

First off, this is an interesting and new idea for a script, but there are a few issues. Let's begin. Every once and a while, you have punctuation, capitalization, and ...

You seem to have a very high opinion of yourself. I'm just joking. :D As with the other review of your work that I've given you, this is great. But ...