VampireBadger

Lethero knew this was going to be another sleepless night after the they were chase from their territory and hunted tirelessly. could you make this make sense… maybe “after they ...

[quote] The coolness of the rain [quote] there’s something about that… I think maybe something like “the cooling touch of the rain…” mind you, I’m probably just being picky. Ignore ...

The dark crimson curtains parted slowly promoting an ovation of clamouring hands applauding. maybe something more like “slowly prompting a clamouring ovation of applauding” volcanic-magma-waterfal

Okay Wolf, this is what you need to do, update it and tell us a little but more about each sport, and like you said, who'd be interested in it. ...

"Who is to say? They have never failed in a mission before," replied another man “replied a man” would do. “another man” gives the impression that a man has already ...

i want your friendship, you missed out a capital here… i have no explanation for my lack of yearning, …and here Otherwise, A very lovely poem, mate! You might want ...

I would like to start by saying that the beginning of this is fabulous! I mean it was just so well done! I couldn’t believe it, so you know what ...

i didn't really mind the free verse and i thought it was pretty good over all. it made me think but in my opinion, i feel it would be a ...

this isn't half bad V! i knew i'd have to review your work sometime soon so i thought i might as well do it now. you know what i think ...