VampX13

Thank-you also! I heart feedback! The main conflict has not been highlighted yet. These first few entries are meant to establish the daily going-ons in Emily's life. Her world will ...

Thank-you for the feedback. Now to clear up a few things: Emily is Canadian and is in the french emersion program at her school. She often times uses french when ...

Thanks.

Thanks for the feedback. Yes, I didn't really want it go anywhere in particular. It was just a way of me showing how hypocritical I can be and humanity in ...

"We" is a character in the story but I can't introduce them as such because it ruins the whole surprise. (I can only hint at it's character with things like ...

Myth: Thank-you, I am glad you liked it. You are correct about the ... "about". Therefore I shall smite it! Griffinkeeper: Actually I put the prologue there to introduce the ...

Whoops! You're right. *Scurries off to fix that.* (Indeed! Woot-woot, Anne Rice! :>)

Thank you for the advice. I will actually be revising some othe mistakes here. Repitition, I now see, is a problem in this introduction. I'll try to lessen my use ...

Yeah, I can see how that would be confusing. Thanks for that correction. Erp - this might take some crazy revising... *Runs off to revise, like a good little Amanda.*

The last part of the poem was something I added as a thought-provoker. I added it a while after I'd finished this poem. Oh and get ready for my head ...

That was very sweet and really did describe Oscar Wilde. And, even though it was primarily ryhming, the poem had a rythm. I love rythmic poetry. I don't think there's ...

Thanks. Feel free to critic a bit too though. After all I would not want my head to swell up too much from compliments.

Oh. I find "you" or, I do believe it's called, second person narritive puts you more so in the story. Instead of reading about a character you are the character. ...